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Thursday, 14 June 2018

Re-crafting our writing

Choose some writing you have done in the last few weeks. Paste it below.
Once  a upon  a time there was  a girl named loala.
loala  and she had love long light brown hair her
eye alway shine just like the sun she was kind. She
and her brother Teingoa went to their cousins house.
Their names were  Faiana and Joseph their mum
name was Ake and dad was


Paste it again. We are now going to re-craft it. To improve
our writing today we need to have
  • A simple sentence    
  • A compound sentence
  • 3 descriptive words
  • Capital letters in the right place
  • Full stops in the right place

Once  a upon  a time a girl named Loala was kind. Loala  had lovely long  light brown hair, and her eyes always shone in the sun. She was kind to her friends and family. She and her brother Teingoa went to their cousin’s house. Their names were  Faiana and Joseph, their mum’s name was Anna and the dad’s was Noa.